RE: Anna!

This is a gripping story, @bruno-kema, The urgency of the father's action is transmitted by the pacing of your story. Even the arrangement of words on the page makes a difference. For example, you separate them so that dramatic moments stand alone. This phrase, for example:

A house was on fire.

and then

My house was on fire!

The significance of this information is driven home by the way it is placed on the page. You did a very, very good job here.

Thank you for posting this story in the Ink Well community. You are consistently a positive presence here. I am affixing the reminder to comment, although you do this.

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