Lee's Story - Ink Well Fast and Furious Festival - Day Five
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Task - Day Five Prompt - Bringing It All Together
This is Lee. He was reported missing at the age of fifteen. He has been missing for more than thirty years.
Lee has been found and he is going to meet his parents for the first time in thirty years. Your story is going to be about their reunion. Think about the setting and how you could describe it to convey how Lee or his parents are feeling. Try to include some dialogue that tells us a little about the characters of Lee, his mum and his dad.
Make a few notes about the story arc - we have three characters. Do they want to see each other? Is the long time apart an obstacle or is there another obstacle for one of the characters? How will you use the reunion to resolve the conflict created by the obstacle?
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Answer
Lee's Story
Lee's father: yes, you weren't wrong, I wanted him to stay alive too, but I had to continue I couldn't stop working and living because of Lee's absence.
Can you imagine what he will feel when he sees us, we are no longer the young parents he lost, we are now two sick old men with marks on our bodies and faces that show the life we went through without him.
Look at the clock, it will soon be here, you can hear the noise of the people and the reporters all anxious to see how he is.
Lee's mother: I am nervous, how will my poor son be, I will tell him that he is still young and can start again with our support and the community.
Lee: the car is moving at great speed which is the rush to get there, it has been so long that I do not want to arrive, how much natural light, my eyes hurt but I want to look, how the city has changed, the trees are different, there are many people in the streets and I do not want to talk or see my parents or anyone really, for sure they will want to hug me, who I do to avoid that moment that must happen?.
I would like to cry, I feel guilty, I didn't want to leave them, I was a fool who let me be fooled, now I am an old man who doesn't know how to work and has no social life.
What a fuss to see me arrive, people applaud me, them takes pictures of me, I walked very fast, my body is agitated I can not breathe. They tell me that in the office there will be my mother who is crying and waiting to touch me.
I open the door and in the background, they are standing in silence with immobile bodies, old and small, is it them?
They look at each other in silence and tears start to fall to the floor, deep and slow breaths make them move their legs, they join in a strong hug and break the silence with an ¡I love you! For Lee, the fears are over and her parents' breath has returned.
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Hi @soyunasantacruz I love your reunion. You gave us the point of view from all three individuals on how they feel now and how they felt then he went missing. The mom is typical of never giving up hope that her child will be returned to her. The dad feeling that in order to keep the family together while Lee is gone, he has to keep busy. I like the father's thoughts on how their son will view their outward appearance and whether he will remember them.
It's apparent from your dialogue all three individuals are nervous at the reunion. However, I think Lee is especially anxious due to his feeling of being socially distant and now what he perceives is expected of him.
I wanted to be inside each character so I could see their feelings.
It was very difficult to close it, they could not find the words, in the end there were no words in the characters only a "I love you" because I believe that in those moments the words are too much and the tears release all contained emotion.
Thank you for such an objective and beautiful comment. @justclickindiva
I agree, point of view was handled very well. Poignant. Resolution of everyone's anxiety addressed.
Thank you, I appreciate your careful reading and that you will appreciate the resolution of the characters' emotional factors.
Thank you for your comment @agmoore
Your story clearly show the anxiousness of lee parents to finally unite with their son. Every parent will be anxious, when they're not sure of their son's response. Lee on the other side seem to have lost hope of them until now and wonder if he do cope well. That's a great story there
Thank you @dwixer , I focus on the fears of the characters. But the closing was a little difficult for me to do.
You did well. It's not difficult putting up an end. This festival days are days of learning.
That is true, in five days I feel I have learned a lot.
A mother somehow knows - and she was right :D
Thank you for stopping by and leaving a message. @kaerpediem 👍
Hello @soyunasantacruz,
My official response here :):
You create a scene effectively. You convey emotion, both through descriptive language and through the use of dialogue. You create an arc, which takes us from the beginning of the incident to a satisfying resolution. There is conflict.
All in all,a very successful Day 5 exercise.
Thank you very much, I appreciate your comments and it makes me very happy to keep moving forward.
It leaves me very motivated. Thank you @agmoore
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I love your angle on the story and how you describe everyone's reaction to the return of Lee. It's as always very typical for his mom to be so hopeful.
Thank you, it was difficult for me this exercise. Guessing the feelings of each character led me to an internal conflict 😬🤭.
Thank you for reading me and leaving a nice comment. @young-boss-karin
You're welcome. It was an interesting read.
I congratulate you for the good use of dialogues. (I don't know how to make good dialogues).
I really enjoyed your reunion. I loved the description of Lee's feelings.
And the resolution of the story was a masterpiece:
It was a real pleasure to read you @soyunasantacruz
Thank you @marcybetancourt I value your opinion very much and I am flattered by your appreciation.
Thank you best regards 🙋🏽♀️