RE: The Inkwell Contest: Week One Draft- No Strangers

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Greetings, @bruno-kema!
You have chosen the moment of a street riot to make two strangers meet. The atmosphere is well described, surely the characters know what is going on, they don't talk to each other, they just meet and stand side by side sharing in silence the knowledge of what is happening and the fears. When it is safe they separate and meet again years later. What goes through their minds, we know that they recognise each other and that something inside them is moving....

Surely the editing of your story will incorporate scenes that will move us.

I wish you luck in the contest.



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Thank you very much for your insightful comment.

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Thank you very much for your insightful comment.

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