RE: The Inkwell Contest: Week One Draft- No Strangers

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It was a nice story there, you started by introducing to us the time and the settings which was believed to be in the evening, and did well to paint that feature of recognition.
I have few things I noticed that might need improvement from my perspective.
1.The characters were not introduced

  1. Was it a coincidence that they met again on same street or they lived around there?

  2. What caused the riot?,

  3. walked last each other
    I believed it's " walked past each other

  4. they stopped. And turned.
    The full stop should be a coma before the " and turned"

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Thank you @dwixer, your correction has been duly noted. I will make sure they reflect in the next draft.

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Thank You for considering the suggestions

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