THE LAKE MONSTER

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Back with all of us our brave and charismatic coolxxx, on a very sunny Sunday, and very anxious to be stressed about doing nothing, of course very worried about what to do, because he got hungry he decided to go fishing, to see if at the same time he could rest a little more, but several of his friends warned him not to go to the lake, which was near his house because it used to be inhabited by a monster. Coolxxx joins this journey, not caring what the others say, he just wanted to fish.


After several hours in the boat fishing, he was only carrying two weights, he felt very tired and decided to rest a little, but in a few minutes his boat moved very strong that woke him up, he got up and looked in front of him and saw a gigantic sea monster, he was perplexed.

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-¡ What I was missing was a sea monster !


-¡ It couldn't be a big catfish to eat for a week !


The frightened sea creature begins to move the boot, as our brave friend could not face it but screamed like a screaming girl.


- Help! A monster is attacking me!


He realized that there was no one and the creature was still stalking him, managing to knock down the lake as he could he rode the creature as if it were a wild horse, even managing to tame, the sea creature was already very tired, as he could he saw that he had in one of its fins a large wooden splint that bothered him, he managed to remove it, the sea monster jumped in the lake with joy, he licked it like a dog who loves his master, he walked it around the lake inside and outside the lake. In gratitude, our marine friend brought him many fish that overflowed his boat, he said goodbye to his new friend who went to the depths of the lake and never saw him again.

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It seems unbelievable, but our super friend, realized that it was just a dream, got up to continue fishing in another part of the lake, what he does not know that behind him the monster is waiting patiently and really exists.


All the drawings were made by @coolxxx.

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Kudos for the pictures. Just wonderful. The story, also, is delightful. There are translation issues, but the sense of the story shines through (particularly with the aid of those pictures).

If you look back at the first paragraph, you will see that you have attached a Spanish sentence to the beginning of the story. You might want to remove that, or move it.

You turn the monster into a docile pet through an act of kindness. Thank you for posting this story in the Ink Well community.

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Thank you, I've corrected it, I'm glad you liked my story.

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I loved your pictures, and I enjoyed your story.

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Hello, @coolxxx ! A lovely story with a lovely character with the same name as you. What a happy coincidence!
I became, by the magic of colours, a child reader.
Now that I write to you, how I wish you would rework it to make it a little slower (so that the children can assimilate the actions given) at the moment of the understanding between the fisherman and the monster. Even if it's a dream, it's a nice dream worth enjoying more, because it illustrates how different people can understand each other.

Thank you for this beautiful story!

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This story is so much fun, @coolxxx. You take us on a thrilling little fishing journey, and tell a story within a story. I love how you added that extra layer, that the monster is just a dream, but then it really exists... right behind our little pumpkin-headed fisherman. Do you write for children?

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Thank you for your nice comment and I hope you liked my story.

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