Out of Hand

Things get far away when-
We don't put a stop at the right time
When we carry on for too long-
Without an end in sight.

Things get out of hand when-
We don't seem to know when to call it a day
When we do not stop-
At the red light.

Things go way off when-
We don't seem to be clear
When we are indecisive - saying neither yay nor nay-
For too long a time.

Things veer off when-
Life happens and we cannot gather the pieces
When we lose hope-
And lose our way.
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a good poem with a nice theme.

I like the structure you use with the similar opening lines to the stanzas, and a short punchy closing line.

in line four of the 4th stanza I'd suggest you could write it as Without end in sight to bring it closer to the other three closing lines.

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Awwnn. Thank youuu!
Your words are well noted.😊

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Good literary piece @chiddoken, I suggest you keep hope on the road.

Thank you for being happy.

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Thank youuu. We surely have to keep hope alive again.

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This poem teaches us to set boundaries.

We shouldn't overstay our welcome in people's lives and places.

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Hmmm...another welcomed perspective.
We should know when to keep on staying, and also when to let go.

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