The tunnel

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It was very dark all night and it didn't stop raining, I just had to go to the city of San Martin, but night had already fallen, I had only been traveling for more than eight hours, I only had to pass the San Lorenzo tunnel, I still had to get there, this would be my first subway, I finally reached the tunnel, but before reaching the tollbooth I decided to walk a bit around the place, to see how marvelous the construction was, well under the cold rain, what What was more fantastic was that next to the tunnel there was another where another train passed. Suddenly out of nowhere a strange subject appears, he looked like a worker, but I couldn't see his face well because of the rain, but the cold suddenly invaded me inside my skin.


The stranger asked me very kindly to take him to the other side, I was not afraid and I accepted to take him without problem, since it was still raining, in my mind I knew that he did not think twice, I knew exactly what to do if he I was presented with a situation like this, I leave everything to God. We got in the car, I arrived at the tollbooth and passed without incident, silence invaded my home, darkness invaded my car, but the light was activated inside the tunnel, fear was like my shadow always by my side, I looked at the strange passenger, he I made a comment that he had been working on the tune for a long time, he told me from the beginning, when everything was a forest without souls, I hear that very strange.

I asked him again about his work and if his house was far away, he replied that it is close to the end of the tunnel, I saw it very naturally without any problem, they are already ten minutes away, I only have five more minutes to go To reach the end, my prayers to God were heard, I can see the end of the tunnel, but it continues to rain under this night that is very long without a horizon, the moment finally arrived, we left the tunnel, just a few kilometers from this A strange passenger asks me to let him know that his house is behind that fence, but the rain was so strong that he couldn't see the place well, but there was a notice, he said good night and continued with his destination, the days passed and at After his trip to the city, the young man finished his work, he had to go back and go through the tunnel again, the case that it was daylight before taking the tollbooth, he goes to where the mysterious man left to say goodbye to him, he parks the car continuing on foot, when he reaches the fence where I left him, he sees the notice and notice the following, because it says "San Lorenzo Cemetery", he asks the guard who was looking after it, he answers that it has been closed for a long time and that it was built for the people who died building the Tunnel, that he is shocked by what he is seeing He returns, following his way home, in his mind he only thinks about the mysterious man who was dead or a specter that accompanied him until he reached his destination.

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The story of a spectre in the night...it is one that haunts our imaginations. This is why it works well for you in this story. You create a dark mood. This also works well for you. The sense of an ominous event is strong and emphasized by the the narrator's turning his fate over to God.

The story reads well. Please look at your sentence structure. In many cases a period would serve better than a comma. There are many complete sentences that you connect with commas. Correcting this in future stories would enhance readability.

Thank you for sharing this with us, @newton666

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A story that makes us wonder if what we read about really happened or if our fears have betrayed our protagonist and it was all just a dream. An excellent story that traps us in suspense and intrigue.

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