Brown Eyes -5minutefreewrite

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Brown eyes. I used to feel sad that I didn't have brown eyes. "Brown eyed girl" and all that. They seem deeper. Like having blue eyes makes me shallow. WHatever weirdo

so much ugh in my belly and brain
NO FOCUS
Ok.

Steven was made out of people parts

BUT what did he FEEL
he looked at his own brown eyes. AND IT CHANGED HIM

for the better

ugh

No, let's think of story.

He is the audience insert, and he, deep down, needs to learn how to love himself.

So he goes through some trials

Wait why doesn't he love himself?

Um, because he read and absorbed some ideas about what being a man is and what being a good person is and what they have to do with eye color that he doesn't have.

You were onto something for a second, go back

He struggled to recognize the good in himself. He didn't particularly recognize himself at all actually

He saw himself as another appendage. Like, here's my arm, ending in a hand, here's my leg ending in a foot, and here's me, ending in a thought or an action or a feeling.

Feelings are all there is. how did he feel about that? He felt... sad, probably. He felt sad. He didn't consciously realize he was sad, but he was.

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Cool freewrite.
That's how it goes in my head and then I don't write it down because it makes no sense in writing, but in my head it sort of does.

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Yeah. There's a lot of things that are hard to out into words that we try to get at with words anyways and hope they trigger in our audience what we were conveying. Poetry is supposedly the form for that, but I dunno. It gets lost in other parts of the gestures vaguely then lies down

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