Trapped

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The crowd screamed so loud to the extent one cannot easily hear him/her self. They were eagerly anticipating the performance of Justin, the 3-times MTV base music award winner who was to perform his award winning song "locked in your love".
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Behind the stage Justin took a few deep breaths, his knees were shaking from the nervousness, and his bladder was making him take the road to washroom one too many times. The SoFi stadium in Inglewood was huge, and it was filled to the max. Justin took one final breath, put his earpiece in its place and waited under the stage.

He will appear on stage after the opening act was finished. His mind was entering into a state of maximum concentration, nothing could go wrong today. Little did he know that this was his last performance ever.

His crew were behind him, just as the lift took him onto the stage. He was the main act, the uproar from the crowd almost brought him to tears, everyone cheered and called out his name. He was living his dream, but it didn't take long however, for this dream to turn into a nightmare.
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Halfway through his performance, he approached the edge of the stage to get closer to his fans. His fans pressed hard to get just one touch of his glimmering skin. He walked across the edge of the stage, giving his fans a sweeping touch of his hands. Unless someone grabbed his hand making him halt his surfing, everything was going smoothly as his hand floated seemlessly over the wave of infinite fingers,

Being a professional, he continued singing while simultaneously trying to get rid of the hold from some of his fans. When he failed to do it for a few seconds, he looked back and froze as he found himself falling from the stage. The music and back track kept running, but he was no longer aware of his surroundings.

The walls around him seemed to close, although there were none to begin with. He found himself teleported in a dimly lit small room where the air smelled dank from being caught in for a long time. It was a nauseating mix of smell of canned food, exotic perfumes, unwashed clothes and bedding. In the background, a soft music played "locked in your love" it was called.

Justin wrote and sang the song. It was an award winning hit, and soon it climbed to the top of the charts. Remembering how happy he was when he heard about the song's success, he cried tears of joy and did his happy uncaring dance. Anyone who heard it could not help but feel absolutely mesmerized, a review said back then.

However, Justin wasn't mesmerized anymore, he was sick to stomach of this song that was playing on a loop for days. The voice came from the four speakers that were in the four corners of his room. Justin tried to reach them often, but he was always stopped by his broken leg. His left leg was bandaged since it was broken after his fall from the stage. He couldn't reach the stereo, and there was no way he could switch it off.

All he could do was to scream at the walls for deliverance, but the walls filled with his own smiling photos, screamed back at him. Just then, he realized that he was trapped in his own song.



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Edited comment: Thank you for making revisions to your story to comply with The Ink Well rules, @davidbright. The story line ending with the star trapped in his own song is an interesting twist.

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Waking up to see this makes me so happy. I can't just describe how happy I am. Thanks so much for yet another opportunity. I promise to always comply with the rules of the community.

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Updated comment: Thank you for making those changes, @davidbright. Your commitment to quality fiction writing and your effort to comply with the focus and intent of our community and our rules is very much appreciated.

One suggestion for you on your revised story. Instead of "far from the stage," I think you mean "fall from the stage."

Justin tried to reach them often, but he was always stopped by his broken leg. His left leg was bandaged since it was broken after his far from the stage. He couldn't reach the stereo, and there was no way he could switch it off.

Thanks and keep writing!

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You are right. I'll quickly make the corrections. Thanks so much for pointing that out and also for giving me yet another opportunity. I'm do grateful.

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Hi @davidbright. Thank you for your response. Yes, if you would like to edit the story, please do. Let me know. I will be happy to unmute it if the material is fine for our community, and can edit my response as well so it does not remain with the story.

I very much appreciate that you are listening and learning!

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@jayna please check if its better now. I just edited it. Sorry for the stress. I just hope it's better now. If not, please can you help tell me where else I can edit. Thanks in anticipation. I appreciate your time.

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Still haven't heard from you. Please I need your response @jayna

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Sorry I missed your earlier comment. The story unmuted now.

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Interesting read. It felt like I was in a cinema watching a movie. Nice one

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That is very well written David, and what a twist at the end hahahaha, never saw that one coming, being stuck in a song that you can't turn off would be something else, especially if it was forever!!!
Excellent pick of graphics also, very well matched to the storyline.
Couple of little errors:
"the uproar from crowd almost" should be from "the" crowd lol.
"since it was broken after his far from the stage." should be "fall" from the stage?

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I'm glad you love the story. It gives me the motivation to do more.

Thanks so much for those corrections. I've done them. I appreciate

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Hello @davidbright. I liked your story from the viewpoint of the singer. I often wonder about entertainers how they deal with their success, together with the setbacks they may encounter. I wonder do they ever get tired of lyrics they sing for the success of their work. Does it project their true feelings or just to get ratings?

Of course, as all other commenters noted, projecting the entertainer inside the walls of a song of his own creation suggests the lyrics irritate him in some way. Only he knows and understands the circumstances that causes him to feel this way.

Thanks for sharing your story. Take care.

Read through @dreemport

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