Act Of Greed
In the eastern coast, Valentine and Vincent were blood brothers who never agreed to each other. The two brothers lived close to forest edge of the coast. Valentine was older than Vincent. Valentine was always treating his younger brother badly and unkind to him. When there father died, Valentine took all their father's belongings, including all the good food and clothes.
In the morning Valentine used to go into the forest and hunt for meat and search firewood, he sells everything he got in the market. One morning he was chopping branches of trees in the forest, until he to ancient magic tree.
Valentine was shocked when the tree asked him to stop and said,
“Please sir, please don't chop down my branches I can't survive without them. Spare my life and I will make you rich with my golden fruits. I will give you my golden fruits.”
Valentine agreed with the tree offer but he was not sure how many fruits the tree will give to him.
The tree offered Valentine with some golden fruits but Valentine was not happy with the number of fruits the tree gave him.
Valentine was full of greed and was asking for more golden fruits. He threatened to chop the entire tree if he was not given more fruits. But, instead the tree said some magic words and sharp thorns were falling on Valentine like rain. Valentine was on ground, and was crying in pain as it was getting late.
Vincent was worried about his brother and was search for Valentine. He searched inside the forest until he found Valentine under a tree bleeding, lying on the ground in pain with thorns all over his body.
Vincent rushed his brother and was slowly removing the thorns from his body. Once all the thorns were out from Valentine body, Valentine apologized to Vincent for treating badly and promised to be a good brother. The ancient tree was happy with what he saw and throw down plenty golden fruits to the two bothers.
Hmmm… An important lesson here is that greed is never good. Valentine was too greedy and wanted more, and that was why he got punished by the tree.
Hello @cryptofi,
Stories about brothers have great value as metaphors. If we look at the Christian religious tradition, for example, we have Cain and Abel, Joseph and his twelve brothers. These stories are meant to instruct us, morally, and so yours does. It is the younger brother, through forgiveness, generosity and kindness, who saves the older brother.
This is a good story. Gentle proofreading would make it even better. Little errors such this one:
interfere with the reader's enjoyment of your fine story. You probably meant so say something like this: until he came to an ancient, magic tree.
You see how that reads better?
You did a great job. I look forward to reading more of your thoughtful stories.
Thanks for the kind words, I'm glad you liked it, I really appreciate it.
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Thanks for the comment, so glad you liked it.
I will always do my best to comment on other writers posts.
@cryptofi, we have discovered that your story is plagiarized from another story here. You have been warned about this in the past. Unfortunately, because you have chosen not to follow our rules after having them explained to you on multiple occasions, we have no choice but to mute you from the community.