Intuition (original poetry)

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There's a tightrope twixt crazy and insane,
balanced between the magic and mundane.

Some spin in circles, others shatter walls,
chaos and order still dance through them all.

There's no right when balance is all that's left,
but a life not living is far worse than death.

If life's just a game isn't death the prize?
Our souls stripped down out of this 'I' disguise?

When it's clear we're the Universe at play,
feel the flow of life as 'you' fades away.




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Super nice one. The art and the writing. 👌🏼💕🌞🎶💯💃👍🏼

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@clayboyn clayboyn, That is called life, and yes, perhaps, the general prize is death. We have to live every moment, we do not know when the last one will be.

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Beautiful, I love the flow and the empowering message. We are the universe xxxx

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It's easy to rhyme, but to rhyme and still maintain your poem's central thread without any "mundane" disruption takes perfection
And you've done just that. Wunderbar!

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First, awesome image; I'm assuming you made that, since there is no attribution. Your rhyme works really well; it doesn't seem forced at all. That's a significant accomplishment, any time you choose to rhyme, as you probably know. As far as death being our prize, I would argue that death simply indicates the end of the game, and our prize is the awareness that 'I' is a primary illusion of this life. And I guess if death is the final release of the 'I' back into awareness or consciousness, then it could be the prize, so I see what you're saying there. As far as your choice to use couplets, was that to represent the duality of this reality? Anyway that's what I see in it. Cool poem all in all. :)

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The couplets might just be a breakdown in my logic processor at this point. I don't really think or plan when I write. I just meditate and words fall out and they're usually in the 10 syllable 10 line format for whatever reason. I just go with it.

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